Level 3 - 30 out of 40 marks
-A good attempt
-Creative use of titles (hand written/drawn) but mise en scene needs lots more care. (5)
-Lipsyncing good
-2 characters styled well, appropriate genre, theme of song
-Some shots very blurry e.g. mobile phone (2)
-Writing on hand and titles must be neater/artier - just not so slapdash (2)(5)
-Hugging scenes look a bit weak
-Calendar element - should move through year instead of repeating same month. (2)(5)
after getting my feedback from my teacher, i understand many things i need to push my work to a level 4, the main issues i need to attend to (numbered according to the mark scheme) are:
(2) framing a shot
(5) mise en scene
these numbers are represented alongside comments to clearly show where the issues have arisen.
Andy. Try and set yourself targets for improvement. What are you going to do to get your grade up?
ReplyDeleteWhat else have you learnt from audience feedback (think about Laura's comments about the illustrations).